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Are parents are the best teachers?
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January 4, 2012
7:53 am
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Are parents are the best teachers?


Parents are always worried about children's education. Some of them help their children in various subjects when they reach home. Some believe that parental help may lead to more improvements. However, others take an issue on this statement and they emphasis on the limitation of their help. This essay will outline whether parents are the good tutor or not.

Parents should spend their times with children and help them in increasing their knowledge in various subjects. First and foremost, it is patently clear that, teachers do not have enough time to spend for each student owing to the number of students in each class, whilst parents can concentrate on their own child on help him to do his exercises. Secondly, parents methods in teaching can be useful to some extent, because they know their children's abilities better than others.

Parental assistant in children's education may be faced by some problems. One should not overlook the fact that parents do not have sufficient information in every subjects and their knowledge are limited. On the other hand, parental communication may be disturbed. Take, for example, when a child cannot understand something, his mother become angry and will quarrel with him. In psychological point of view, the effects of these conflicts are inevitable on child's mind.

All in all, so far I could judge, the above-mentioned reasons might shed light on my subscription to the view that parents regarding to their education can help their children, but their assistant should be organized because of their knowledge and behavior.

January 8, 2012
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Are parents are the best teachers?


Educating children to understand the need to obey rules and respect others always begins in the home and is widely thought to be the responsibility of parents.

In the first place, home schooling can be mentioned.It is some times claim that children like to spend their time with the peers and this fact is one of the essential reason that parents should mention.However, children spend their rest of time in home and with their parents ,it is easy to guess children learn the parents behavior.It is clear that some times parents are the best teacher for their little child.

The second point to consider is the feeling of motherhood and fatherhood which helps the parents to accept the responsibility  of teaching to their children and this is s fix point between human and animal.However,if parents are not able to teach the child in order to addiction or drug abuse, it is the government responsibility to take the child and find the new parents for them.

To put the whole issue in a perspective , home is the first school for the children and parents are the first teacher for their child and i strongly believe that parents are the best teacher for the babies and after that schools are resposibiled for this goals.

February 27, 2012
3:47 am
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Hello Mosalla and Sina

Thanks for these two essays on this topic.

Sorry for the delays in replying!

Please feel free to comment on other people's essays in the forum! Your suggestions will help!

February 27, 2012
4:02 am
writefix
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Hello Mosalla

A couple of suggestions on your essay on parents as teachers: try to simplify some sentences, and try to keep sentences short

Simplify and specify

However, others take an issue on this statement and they emphasis on (emphasize)the limitation of their help.

Would this sentence be clearer? It's more specific

However, other parents disagree with doing schoolwork with their children and believe that there are limits to what parents can teach their children.

You wrote:

In psychological point of view, the effects of these conflicts are inevitable on child's mind.

This could be simplified as

If parents try too hard to get involved with schoolwork, it may lead to conflict with the child and affect their relationship

Simplify: Avoid the passive

  • Parental assistant in children's education may be faced by some problems.

This could be rewritten more simply as:

  • Parents who try to assist their children with schoolwork may face some problems.

Other points

  • This essay will outline whether parents are the good tutor or not ==>are good tutors or not.
  • It is patently clear that, teachers do not have enough time ==> it is patently clear that teachers do not have enough time

If in doubt, leave commas out!

  • On the other hand, parental communication may be disturbed.

On the other hand does not mean in addition or "here's another point" – it means "here's an opposite point" or "in contrast"

Long sentences

First and foremost, it is patently clear that, teachers do not have enough time to spend for each student owing to the number of students in each class, whilst parents can concentrate on their own child on help him to do his exercises (43 words)

All in all, so far I could judge, the above-mentioned reasons might shed light on my subscription to the view that parents regarding to their education can help their children, but their assistant should be organized because of their knowledge and behavior. (42 words!)

Try not to use "above-mentioned" – just use "these." Don't add too many beginning phrases to the sentence: In conclusion, as far as I can see, in my opinion, it is patently clear from the above, I think parents should.…  Just say what you want to say.  Keep sentences shorter than 20 words. Your average sentence length should be about 12 words. If you write 20 sentences at 12 words average, that's 240 words – perfect for IELTS!

 

Here's a simpler version of your conclusion:

All in all, parents can help their children, but they need to keep their assistance within limits. Their expertise is in supporting and encouraging the children, not replacing the teacher.

February 27, 2012
4:20 am
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Hi Sina

Thanks for this essay. It's 217 words long which would mean a big penalty in IELTS for being underlength. Underlength essay are also usually underdeveloped  -  the ideas are not complete or not fully explained, and this is a problem here also.

Introduction

Your introduction is very short. It gives an opinion, but it would be better with a thesis sentence – a sentence which says what you are going to discuss in the essay.

Body

The first sentence in the body paragraphs should be topic sentences. The reader should know what the rest of the paragraph will be about. It's like a label or sign. In Paragraph 2, it seems you were going to discuss home schooling (where parents keep their children at home, and don't send them to school, but teach their children themselves). However, the rest of the paragraph doesn't develop this idea.

In the first place, home schooling can be mentioned. It is some times claim that children like to spend their time with the peers and this fact is one of the essential reason that parents should mention. However, children spend their rest of time in home and with their parents ,it is easy to guess children learn the parents behavior.

What does 'mention' mean in this paragraph? It is here twice.

Paragraph 3

Your have two sentences in Paragraph 3 – one with 35 words, one with 33. Keep sentences short (max 20 words), and have some short sentences as well (4 – 10 words).

I recommend having 7 sentences  in a body paragraph. Have 1 topic sentence, 3 clear ideas in short separate sentences, and 3 short examples. You can read more about 3773 layout here (3 sentences in your intro, 7 in the first body para, 7 in the second body para, and 3 in the conclusion).

Overall, there are really not enough ideas in the essay, and they are not fully explained. Don't use phrases like

  • To put the whole issue in a perspective
  • It is some times claim that children like to spend their time with the peers 

to fill up your essay – just give ideas and examples. And be careful with word count!

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