 Dominoes
- Keep Playing!
Many students lose marks in writing because they don't develop ideas.
They have good ideas, but don't write enough about each one In the game
of dominoes, you keep playing until you cannot continue. Keep
writing until you can't continue! (And then start a new paragraph!)
Take a paragraph like:
Many people think that the Internet will replace books and
newspapers because it is cheaper and quicker. As well as that, it is
easier to use.
Bad! The writer put two ideas together - "cheaper" and
"quicker." He or she didn't explain how the Internet is cheaper
and quicker. And is the Internet really "easier to
use"? The ideas are good , but the development is weak. Develop Your Ideas
Let's develop the sentences.
The Internet is cheaper than newspapers, because
you can read many newspapers for free on their websites. The
Internet is quicker to bring news and information out. It
can take years for a book to be published and reach the bookstore. The
information is often out of date. For me, the Internet
is easier to use, because you can find information
more quickly and easily than in a big library or in a big set of
encyclopedias. You just use a search engine and the results come
instantly.
Add a Topic
Now all you need is a topic sentence.
Many people think that the Internet will
replace books and newspapers because it is cheaper, quicker and easier
to use. The Internet is cheaper than newspapers, because you can
read many newspapers for free on their websites. The Internet is quicker
to bring news and information out. It can take years for a book to be
published and reach the bookstore. The information is often out of date.
For me, the Internet is easier to use, because you can find information
more quickly and easily than in a big library or in a big set of
encyclopedias. You just use a search engine and the results come
instantly.
Transitions and Markers
Finally, lets add some transition words and markers like
"First", "Another point is that..,"
"Furthermore,.." etc. Let's also not repeat "The
Internet" every time.
Many people think that the Internet will replace books and
newspapers because it is cheaper, quicker and easier to use. First
of all, the Internet is cheaper than newspapers, because you can
read many newspapers for free on their websites. Secondly,
it is also much quicker to bring news and information out. It can take
years for a book to be published and reach the bookstore. The
information is often out of date. Another
important point is that the Internet is easier to use, because
you can find information more quickly and easily than in a big library
or in a big set of encyclopedias. You just use a search engine and the
results come instantly.
What would you like to do now?
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