you have quite long introduction, you should shorten it, and have more ideas for body paragraphs

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In this highly sophisticated world of competition every all parents want their child to attain some high position. So from their very young age, the parents inculcate in them the urge and importance to study and to achieve highest level of knowledge. It is rightly said that a person who continuously studies is known as a book worm. But on the other hand if the child simultaneously indulges in extracurricular activities likes sport, dance, music, arts. This will enable the child to explore his ideas and make him more flexible and versatile.

To begin with, in my view, I am against the view point of the topic(what point?). I, earnestly believe that a human being becomes more wise and intelligent only when he interacts with the outer outside world that is when he starts exploring new-new ideas. If a child is studying at an uninterruptable pace, this will make the child more over like a linustic, which spontaneously mugs up somethings and repeatedly reproduces these words in front of others

The children who are not exposed to other activities tend to face failures as their mind is focused on one particular thing, that is just study, study and study. Moreover as they are not into ( or do not have) the habit of playing, this will turn the child into a pessimistic person. which in long run this has a negative impacts on his future. For example, if a person loves studies, Whenever he goes he will continuously talk about his studies. His friends listening to his talks will think that he is really consider him as a bookmarks and will ( or stop their friendship) not want to be friends with him. This in turn will make the child(or lack of communication skill) more self centred, which (or which is difficult for him to succeed in the future)will prove fatal for his career

On a whole , I believe that parents should try to understand a childs intellectual capabilities and according to the childs interests involve him in studies as well as other play way entertainment activities which will nuture the child for a better future ahead.

To begin with, in my view, I am against the view point of the topic. I, earnestly believe that a human being becomes more wise and intelligent only when he interacts with the outer world that is when he starts exploring new-new ideas. If a child is studying at an uninterruptable pace, this will make the child more over like a linustic, which spontaneously mugs up somethings and repeatedly reproduces these words in front of others

The children who are not exposed to other activities tend to face failures as their mind is focused on one particular thing, that is study, study and study. Moreover as they are not into the habit of playing, this will turn the child into a pessimistic person which in long run has a negative impact on his future. For example, if a person loves studies. Whenever he goes he will continuously talk about his studies. His friends listening to his talks will think that he is really a bookmarks and will not want to be friends with him. This in turn will make the child more self centred, which will prove fatal for his career

On a whole , I believe that parents should try to understand a childs intellectual capabilities and according to the childs interests involve him in studies as well as other play way activities which will nuture  the child for a better future ahead.