It is undeniable and inevitable that when technology pours into daily life, people are influenced in all respects. This is true especially for the younger generation, because they tend to accept the novelty much easier. Whether a culture would disappear is decided not only by the number of people who are acting traditionally, but also by the number of people to whom the culture to be passed.(I m quite confused with this sentence, espectically the sentence after but also) If the youth in a country, under the impact of technology, are not willing to acquire the skills from the older or want to live a life different from their forefathers, the traditions would be gradually forgotten.

However, the developed technology and traditional skills and ways of life are not mutually exclusive. Instead, keeping these two factors going hand in hand is what makes a whole country. The innovation and improvement of communication and transportation methods make the world smaller and smaller. As a result, the identity of a country is in danger of being assimilated. Under such circumstance, traditional skills and ways of life(actually, custom is okay) could characterize the country and make it outstanding from the rest all over(the rest of the world/ all over the world) the world.

Besides, every skill or lifestyle makes contribution to cultural diversity. It is supposed to be a valuable heritage of human beings, passing on to our descendants. So every tradition should be paid attention to and preserved well.

Traditional skills and ways of life to a country are what(equivalent to) a soul to a person. So from perspectives of both a country and the whole world, trying to keep them passing on is of great importance rather than useless.

Undoubtedly, the essay is awesome. You rarely make grammar mistakes in the essay, and the diverse sentence patterns used in your work.

With the great progress in technology, many countries have been experiencing fierce conflicts between the developed cutting-edge technology and the traditional skills and ways of life. However, not matter how sharp the conflicts are, traditions, in terms of skills and ways of life, are not necessarily discarded.

It is undeniable and inevitable that when technology pours into daily life, people are influenced in all respects. This is true especially for the younger generation, because they tend to accept the novelty much easier. Whether a culture would disappear is decided not only by the number of people who are acting traditionally, but also by the number of people to whom the culture to be passed. If the youth in a country, under the impact of technology, are not willing to acquire the skills from the older or want to live a life different from their forefathers, the traditions would be gradually forgotten.

However, the developed technology and traditional skills and ways of life are not mutually exclusive. Instead, keeping these two factors going hand in hand is what makes a whole country. The innovation and improvement of communication and transportation methods make the world smaller and smaller. As a result, the identity of a country is in danger of being assimilated. Under such circumstance, traditional skills and ways of life could characterize the country and make it outstanding from the rest all over the world.

Besides, every skill or lifestyle makes contribution to cultural diversity. It is supposed to be a valuable heritage of human beings, passing on to our descendants. So every tradition should be paid attention to and preserved well.

Traditional skills and ways of life to a country are what a soul to a person. So from perspectives of both a country and the whole world, trying to keep them passing on is of great importance rather than useless.