hi ,Allen, my comments maybe not right,but i will try my best to speak out my opinion. and i posted a essay,i hope we can interact our views on each essays.

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

today’s people can use modern forms of communication, such as telephone, email, social networks, and so forth

if i were you i will write"people today can use modern vehicles of communication,such as telephones,emails,social networks,etc."

the second aspect i want to mention is you used too many "can " in your essay, maybe you can replace some of them with "be able to" or "may".

"he way people contact each other has been change dramatically "           changed  

"numerals"  ___numerous 

welcome to my essay. thx.

allen said

The development of technology changes the way people interact with each other. In which way does it change the types of relationship that people make? Does it have positive or negative effect on the development?

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In the past, people usually wrote a letter to communicate with their friends or relatives who lived far away. (communicate their friends by letters who live far away), Thanks to the advancement of technology, today’s people can use modern forms of communication(ways to communicate), such as telephone, email, social networks, and so forth. This has totally changed the way people contact with each other.?? ur opinion?

The modern technology has deeply affected the relationship between people in some aspects. The most obvious changes is are that people can work, study and carry out other tasks without face-to-face contact in some cases. For instance, people can receive education study through the Internet. In this case, people may not meet their teachers or classmates. A second change is that people can interact with others in the virtual world. They can post their photographs and diaries on some social networks such as Facebook and Twitter so that they can share their lives with others. Finally, modern means of communication can help people broaden their social circles. It is easy to make friends through the Internet (e.g., MSN).

I personally believe that progress in technology benefits people. Firstly, people can ask for help timely when encountering troubles. If they suffer a car accident, they can use their mobile phone to call police. In addition, modern means of interaction can positively contribute to understanding between people. This is because they can know friends better by looking the photos or reading the diaries that friends post on the websites.

In conclusion, the way people contact each other has been change dramatically. The new technology offers numerals ways of communication to people, which positively contributes to human relationship.

in my personal view, if you can discuss both positive and negtive aspects, it will improve the discussion more better. second, i think you just talk some facial phenomenons by using modern commnunication, it would be better if you talk deeply in "influence"