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What cause and how to solve the severe problems with student behavior
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July 27, 2012
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I had try to simplify and short my essay, I dont know whether this is okay? However, I find new questions. How can I summarize my awful and stupid long sentences to the brief, short and really good form?

I had wrote the essay on paper, then fixed on paper, typed and fixed again in the computer. Finally, find my mistakes and rewrite.  Doubtlessly, it will cost me for a long period. (approximately 5 hours to complete this whole procession) But it difinitely helps me a lot. 

Thanks Enda.

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior.  What do you think are the causes of this?  What solutions can you suggest? 

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.  Write at least 250 words.


Currently, the general education environment is improving, while the behavior of students is deteriorating. In this essay, I would like to discuss both the reason led to this phenomenon and how to cope with it.

The misbehavior of adolescents results in various elements. First of all, working competition is fierce, parents put their attention to their work. They are too busy to care their children, and because of this, children would feel abandoned. Doing something influential would be regarded as the best method to regain the care from their parents. However, their actions are not always right and perhaps break rules accidently. Teachers are irresponsible in some countries is also a reason. The self-control capacity of students is weak; therefore, students would lose themselves without scrutiny. A third point is the excessive pornographic and violence pictures. In many nations, individuals equate forbidden internet regardless of what contents with inhumane. Hence, people could find anything without barriers. According to curious, some youths imitate the actions inside of these pictures.

In order to cope with this these negative repercussions, governments, schools and parents should join force. To start with, despite the intense degree of work, parents need take time to company with their kids. Parents represent a lot in children’s early life. Be it in school or at home, teachers should take more responsibility to their students. It is significant to keep communicate with parents, such as feedback and solution of the children. Thirdly, the authorities should intensify the supervision to the bad information. Governments have to work out a strategy neither jeopardizing the right of citizens nor misleading the students.

To conclude, there are both reasons and suggestions to deal with the exacerbating of the students’ misbehavior. I think each community and individual should take their responsibilities to help children avoid this phenomenon. 

Readability Indices
  • Flesch Kincaid Reading Ease 51 
  • Flesch Kincaid Grade Level 9.6 
  • Gunning Fog Score 12.6 
  • SMOG Index 9.1 
  • Coleman Liau Index 15.7 
  • Automated Readability Index 10.7 
Text Statistics
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  • No. of words 303 
  • No. of complex words 54 
  • Percent of complex words 17.82% 
  • Average words per sentence 13.77 
  • Average syllables per word 1.68
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