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What should be the main function of a university?
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December 10, 2011
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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace.

Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.  

What do you think?

 

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There is a tendency these days that many university graduates have difficulty in finding a decent job, because the subjects they learn at university such as history and archeology are not favored by employers. Therefore, some people argue that it is university’s obligation to equip to their students with the knowledge and skills that are in great demand in the job market. As far as I am concerned, this view is too short-sighted in terms of concerning the fundamental functions of universities. Universities should provide learners with a wide variety of subjects for them to select, regardless of whether the subjects are preferred by employers or not.

 

Universities are founded based on the belief that the existing human achievements in all fields can effectively be passed on to the young generation and the expectation that youngsters can explore more in human thoughts and activities. To serve this purpose, curriculum systems established in universities should cover as many fields as they can, including those job-related ones such as marketing and international trade as well as less job-related ones such as philosophy and politics. It is hard to imagine how our society can keep a balanced development with some of these areas being eliminated.

 

Of course, it is true that one primary aim for students to enter universities is to get a reasonable career.  Although practical knowledge and skills may provide graduate with more advantages in job hunting, the need to develop areas in our society in a balanced way is obviously more important and more beneficial in the long run.

 

In conclusion, university should be a paradise for knowledge rather than a job-oriented institution. The major function of universities is to cultivate real talents in all areas of human life. It is only suggested that universities can offer job training programs for graduates who major in theoretical areas or establish close relationships with potential employers in order to aid students finding a job.   

December 12, 2011
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Hello Sophia

 

Thanks for this essay. I really like the statement in your conclusion:

university should be a paradise for knowledge rather than a job-oriented institution

There is really very little I would change about your essay. I could shorten some sentences...

There is a tendency these days that Many university graduates have difficulty in finding a decent job, 

and I might remove the awkward passive in the conclusion

It is only suggested that universities can offer job training programs for graduates 

could change to:

Perhaps universities could offer job training programs for graduates 

It's very clear what your opinion is. The only problem is that you have concentrated on one side. I think this is fine: it's impossible in 250 words to do justice to a topic like this by giving both sides. I prefer a well-developed essay like yours which focuses on one side.

 

Well done. 

December 12, 2011
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Thanks for all the valuable advice you have offered me and thanks for your encouragement. 

This is really an excellent website. I would like to contribute to it but do not know how.

I think my writing is not good enough to also fix others' essays, though I would like to. 

December 17, 2011
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Hi Sophia

Thanks for the comments! Your writing is more than good enough to benefit others! Please go ahead and comment as much as you like -  I'm sure others will be very grateful! 

 

sophia li said:

Thanks for all the valuable advice you have offered me and thanks for your encouragement. 

This is really an excellent website. I would like to contribute to it but do not know how.

I think my writing is not good enough to also fix others' essays, though I would like to. 

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